Short Story First Draft

This story will change, but here’s my first attempt. I am using British English although it is set in New York City.

You see an otherworldly creature on the way to work. No one else can see it. What do you do?

I left the bus at East 14th Street—near Union Square West. On my way to the coffee shop to work. It was 6:50 a.m. and notably busy with people going to their jobs, and so we had to avoid collisions with each other. There were all types of characters, tall, short, well dressed or in work clothes.
Out of the corner of my eye, I saw a small person dressed in fancy dress. It looked like a little black-eyed, grey alien. A fabulous costume, and looked perfectly right. I smiled at the costumed person and quickly walked passed.
The coffee shop was only at the end of the block. A car screeched around a corner behind me, so I twisted my head to look. The alien looking costumed person was right behind me. I stopped and turned around to talk with this person. “Why you trailing me? Can I help you? Excellent costume by the way.” There was no reply. I frowned and turned to continue my walk to work.
Several steps later, and anticipation got the best of me, so I turned and looked. The alien looking person was still walking behind me. I stopped and turned. “Look, what do you want?” No response. I crouched in front of this character. “You not going to say anything?” Reaching to touch its arm, I could feel the warm grey surface. I removed my hand instantly with some shock.
Its eyes were black and large like an insect, and its body was grey in colour and had thin arms and legs. No nose, or lips around its small mouth. I’d crouched in front of this being for about thirty seconds, and I saw passers-by looking at me with an expression of confusion. A man walked by, and his face seemed the same. A young woman glared at me, so I spoke, “I, I truly think this is an alien, and not simply a fancy d, dress costume.” The girl giggled and walked on her way. What was so funny? Couldn’t she see the black-eyed grey character presently in front of me? I caught the eye of another passer-by. This one was a man in a suit scowling at me. I spoke louder, “Hello there, What’s the problem? Can’t you see this strange costumed person in front of me?” He merely gave a sigh and had a look of disgust on his face. He turned and walked on.
Now I was becoming uncomfortable with confusion. I crouched back down in front of this grey, black-eyed alien. “You appear to have chosen me on purpose. Why me? —I only work at a coffee shop along the road. There are others who would help you much better than myself.” I looked at this alien in one of its huge black eyes, and its head moved to one side like it was trying to understand. I sat cross-legged on the floor in front of the grey alien. I took my mobile phone out of my pocket and said, “I’m going to phone someone who can help… ok?” looking at it in the eye; it didn’t truly seem to understand anything. I called the police and said, “Hello, I’m sat in front of a black-eyed, grey alien on the corner of East 14th Street, near Union Square West.” The officer on the phone responded by saying, “Honestly? Are you sure? This is a prank caller, isn’t it? I’m busy, please don’t prank call.” “I realise this sounds absurd but,” the phone was then hung up. Damn. I turned my phone off.
All right, I was in a situation, and I needed to take action as this grey alien is real. I looked back into the eyes of the grey creature and thought, “If I could see it, perhaps someone else could too, and all I needed to do was to make matters clear to the fifty or so people in the area. Someone might see the alien too. There was a fire hydrant, plainly behind the alien. I made sure the creature was closer it. I stood to my feet and moved towards the steps leading into a building so I could be in a greater location to speak to everyone. On the third level, I could see all along the block, and there was a good quantity of people in view. I announced, “Excuse me, everybody!” This got a lot of attention. “I have this situation, where there is, in fact, a strange creature near this fire hydrant there.” As I said this, I was pointing to the grey alien. “I have come to the assumption not everyone can see it.” At this moment, everyone was beginning to look away and walk in their original direction. “Someone must be able to see it.” A group of five men stopped, and one asked, “Where is it?” So, I responded by saying, “It’s right in front of this fire hydrant… there.”
As I pointed to the black-eyed, grey alien; it raised its head; seemed to smile; then disappeared altogether. “Oh, it’s now disappeared to me too. Oh shit!”

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